Saturday, February 11, 2012

Poem, Kinda Like...

"In the Winter Bathtub, Late At Night"


Splash.

The water-smoke
was all gone.

Instead,
there are water-drops
on the window glass.

The largest drop dewed
down
on the window pane.


Chilly.

I guess
I've forgot
what I was dreaming about.

But
I'm pretty sure
that I shouldn't...


I have to get outa here anyway.
 
 
 
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Just a random writing... XD

I actually wasn't thinking of writing a thing like this these days, but kinda started to feel like doing it, yesterday, in the bathtub. lol


Oh, well, it's been a while since I've last written a poem...
Coz I had a chance to learn how to write a poem at TUJ and felt fun, I long for doing it sometimes. :D
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4 comments:

  1. lockmanFebruary 27, 2012 at 6:54 PM

    I'm glad you posted this poem.

    I enjoyed reading it.

    Thank you.

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    1. morita.tujFebruary 27, 2012 at 8:58 PM

      I never expected someone frm the CIS course to make a comment on this post! :D

      No, I wanna thank you, thank you for reading, and putting a comment on, also! :D
      It is my pleasure! ;)

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  2. AnonymousMarch 5, 2012 at 3:14 PM

    i like the idea of steam being likened to smoke! and i also like how your dream seems to be forgotten in the midst of the steam transforming into dewy condensation--you've created interesting movement with these verses!

    finally, what is most interesting to me is the notion of time. sometimes only a few seconds can feel like minutes, or minutes like hours, and i wonder in this case, was time slowed down for you, or did it go so fast that you couldn't ever fully grasp your dream?

    either way, i enjoyed it! i'm glad our poetry class inspired you to write more, and i hope you will continue to write! ^^

    --yu.

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    1. morita.tujMarch 9, 2012 at 9:26 PM

      So sorry for a late reply! I had to work for my writing assignments! X(;;;

      Well, about the term "water-smoke", I just wanted to uniform two words related to water, in order to express the wetty atmosphere.
      So glad that you liked it! :D

      AND about the time flow, yeah, I was thinking of something like what you've said.
      I sometimes experience a sudden sleep when I am awfully tired, and when I woke up I find myself have been slept for some minutes, however I thought that I was sleeping only for a flash!
      That IS an odd experience. XD

      I guess I wanna write even more ... I don't know when it'll be actually for the next time. XD

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